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     Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1679 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
Brother...thanks for suggestions.. | ||
| Jambalahaart_raja Junior Artist Username: Jambalahaart_raja Post Number: 25 Registered: 07-2008 Posted From: 146.184.0.114 Rating: N/A |
attempt was good, malli attempt cheyi but improvement kanapadaali. mistakes veletthi choopinchakapothey next time feel ayyi rechhipothaav. again, next time, for a change, base on character-sketches rather than incidents unlike this one. time teesko, daily one part laagaa aina parledu, story lo strength kaavaali babai......strength kaavaali.  | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1678 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
nenu regular story writer ni kaaadhu...non-linear narration ni attempt chedhamani..okka concept anukunaa..aa concept drive chesthu...characters ni build chesukunaaaa...I'm not a novel reader..concept anukunanu..narration tho attempt chesanu..... | ||
| Jambalahaart_raja Junior Artist Username: Jambalahaart_raja Post Number: 24 Registered: 07-2008 Posted From: 146.184.0.114 Rating: N/A |
anirvesh lover anjali ni mahesh and anand rape cheyatam ento??  pub lo kalisina taravatha malli mahesh and anand drive chesthunna car ki ravi addu raavatam ento??  okey manishi anirvesh ki sleeping disorder and blood cancer rendu jabbulu undatam ento??  Inspector drug-supplier aina Ravi ni cheyani murder kinda elago tappulu chesevaadani irikinchi bokka lo toyatam ento??  idanthaa aa Director aa Inspector ni adigi maree vintu madhyalo shock avthu last ki appreciate cheyatam ento??  thambi Dhaarkar, neeku cinemalu baagaa ekkinayi naayana. stories ilaa raayaru, balayya babu cinemalu ilaantivi teesthaaru. attempt chesinanduku appreciate chesthunna but definite gaa story writing lo chaalaa improve avvaali. yandamuri novels oka 5 or 6 tirageyyi......you'll know why he is best selling (may not be best in writing!!) | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1677 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
Thanks Elca, Sachin and Rao gaaru... | ||
| Cylonesubbarao Side Hero Username: Cylonesubbarao Post Number: 7388 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 170.61.20.242 Rating: N/A |
Story naaku baagundi abbai... nenu normal viewer ni... ekkuva logics sooda... workout ayipoddi ee cinema ni low budget lo theesthe. At least satellite rights tho anna make over sesukovacchu expenses ni. You must be the change you wish to see in the world  | ||
| Sachin Side Hero Username: Sachin Post Number: 2750 Registered: 04-2008 Posted From: 68.100.138.242 Rating: N/A |
ok..naaku thelisinantha varaku nidra lo gattiga gillithene lechi koorchuntaam alntidi podisthe damn surega first shot ke lesthaadu..poni spruha thappindi anukundamannaaa adi chaalaa blood poyaka ayyiddi....wat ever good try... I HATE CASTE FANATICS | ||
| Elcaminocapastrino Side Hero Username: Elcaminocapastrino Post Number: 6330 Registered: 03-2008 Posted From: 204.95.150.76 Rating: N/A |
dharkaar dude.....just saw ur story in bits and pieces we also made a movie on sleep walking and murder when we were in school in 2003..... the guy walks in sleep wakes up with a knife and blood on it.... then he listens to a murder news in local cable and he is frightens that he committed our movie got good reception with judges and audience good luck | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1676 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
kathi tho poduchukunadu...since stressful gaa vundatam valla..memory weak...so after 2/3 stabbings hosh vasthadhi..but died... as part of my narration .konni liberties teesukoni..director ni introduce chesanu.. | ||
| Sachin Side Hero Username: Sachin Post Number: 2748 Registered: 04-2008 Posted From: 68.100.138.242 Rating: N/A |
annai..after 1 year or 2 years ..police chesindi illegal alaantappudu bayatik enduku chepthaadu ivanni...and 1 more think...kathi tho oka saari kosukunte chaaalu noppitho nidra lonchi lesthaadu alantidi anni saaaru kosukovadam endi? I HATE CASTE FANATICS | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1675 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
adhi jariginaa 1 year ki....Ravi ki aa tharuvathaa em jarigindho ee stroy ki out of scope.... hyderabad lo pollution ekkuvayi..driving chese tapudu ee madhyaa body nee cover chesukuntanaru complete gaa | ||
| Sachin Side Hero Username: Sachin Post Number: 2747 Registered: 04-2008 Posted From: 68.100.138.242 Rating: N/A |
annai ee hand ki gloves pettukovadam endi driving appudu...ravi gurinchi antha thelisina police officer ki ee case lone irikinchaalsina avasarm endi..poni irikinchaade anuko adi evadiko enduku chepthaadu bayati vaallaki... I HATE CASTE FANATICS | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1674 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
Admin/Mods ..please post ur sincere review on my story... | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1671 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
BRICKBATS ...KAAN KE NICHE....BHAIRILU...ani ivandi.. mee reviews pettandi.... | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1669 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: |
Continuation: --------------- Director: Inthaki Anirvesh ni champindhi evaru..? Inspector: akkadike vasthunaa....incident jariginaa next day..Ravi ni enquiry chedhamani pilichanu...athani cell phone tessukovatam jarigindhi..call logs check chesi....athani aa roju vachinaa phone numbers note chesukunanu...ikkade athani partner ni kooda trace chesam...so Ravi background bayatapadindhi....he is a drug supplier..amayakulainaa girls ni trap cheyatam...vallani use chesukovatam...money kosam varini prostitution loki dimpatam..ilanti Background vundhi Ravi ki...Ravi valla entho mandhi innocent girls...drugs tessukonni entho mandhi teenagers chedipovatam...and prathi sari no clue...so I thought why dont I fix him in this case.. Director (curious gaa) - ante nijamgane Ravi anirvesh ni champaledhaaa...? Inspector : ledhu... Director: mari ravi ni ela fix chasaru...? Inspector : challa simple...Anirvesh chainipoyindhi knife stabbing valla...aa knife meedha velli gurhtulu Ravi vi unnayi...and safe lo dhorikinaa finger prints kooda Ravi ve... Director ; okka nimsham agandi...Knife meedha Ravi finger prints ella vunnayi.. Inspector: idhi nenu pakka gaa chepalenu..but aa roju evening ravi anirvesh intiki velinapudu knife use chesi vuntadu...for some purpose...safe lo Ravi ..anirvesh money dongalinchadu..andhuke safe lo ravi finger prints... Director: so money kosam Ravi anirvesh ni champichinatlu meeru create chesaru... Inspector: yes...ilanti criminals bayata thiragatam kaana jail lo vuntene better ana feeling tho... Director..ok.ok..kaani anirvesh ella chanipoyadu.. Inspector: Anirvesh ki blood cancer vundhanaaa depression lo...wallet lo vunna thana girl friend photo choosthu chaala stress lo vunnadu...alane nidhrapoyadu... Anirvesh safe ninchi nenu sekarinchinaa medical reports chadivanu..aa reports ani periodical polysomnography reports...ee reports ni naaku telisinaa doctor ki choopichanu..he referred me to a psychaitrist...psychaitrist reports choosina tharuvathaa he confirmed that Anirvesh is suffering from Sleep walking disorder Director (shock lo) : Sleeping disorder ki ee murder ki enti relation? Inspector: nenu doctor tho chaala discuss chesanu ee disease gurinchi..Doctor said there are incidents that a man can do anything if the sleeping disorder is added with stress..at an extent killing.. himself or anybody ..so adhe jarigindhi...hospital ninchi vachesinaa Anirvesh..chaala stressful gaa vundatam moolanu athaniki telikundaa nidhrapoyadu...as usual gaa koncham sepu tharuvathaa..he started to sleep walk..since stressful gaa vundatam moolana and inkaa motivation leni life anna thought lo padukovatam tho..he had taken the knife on the table and stabbed himself...several tiimes....but stabbing chesukunaa tharuvathaa Anirvesh ki telivi vachindhi..kaani aa time ki its too late...he was hurt badly and condition critical ayyipoyi chanipoyadu... Director (uttershock): oh..my god ... Inspector;; yes..Anirvesh has killed himself.... Director..mari athani finger prints lekapovatam enti knife meedha...? Inspector : Anirvesh intiki vachinapudu depression lo driving glouses teeyatam marchipoyadu..andhuke athani fingerprints levu knife meedha.... Director : so case solved... Inspector: yes.. -----------------------THE END--------------------------------------------------  | ||
| Nanigadu Junior Artist Username: Nanigadu Post Number: 718 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 204.92.92.4 Rating: N/A |
Hmm anand meeru CSI regular ga chusthara, which one you like the most, Grissam's or NY ones, i like both kani naku Miami David Curraso gadini chustuntey mast navvastundi, and dantlo actors antha chala over chestharu, especially David and Doctor (black woman) other than CSI what crime series you follow. I like LAW SVU, Numbers, Flash Point ani recent ga start ayyindi ivi baga chusthanu... | ||
| Chantabbayi Side Hero Username: Chantabbayi Post Number: 2034 Registered: 01-2008 Posted From: 86.9.102.214 Rating: N/A |
inthaki ravi anirvesh ni champinattu cheppaledhu...inko part undha mama  | ||
| Anand_n Junior Artist Username: Anand_n Post Number: 705 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 209.183.51.18 Rating: N/A |
Dharkar , still did not make sense-I have probably watched too much CSI  ammayi anirvesh connection was predictable kind of like the teen deewarein interlinking of seemingly unrelated events.. aa chal ke tujhe main leke chalu ik aise gagan ke tale jahan gam bhi na ho, aansoo bhi na ho,bas pyaar hi pyaar pale ik aise gagan ke tale http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zWUOI_oxeOc&feature=related | ||
| Idle_yzag Side Hero Username: Idle_yzag Post Number: 3870 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.80.153.5 Rating: N/A |
finish chey naku ee twistlu yemi nachaledhu, not that gripping... I expected this accident, GF episode so so ga athikinchinatu vundi below average bomma | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1668 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
mee question ki answer chaduvukondi kindhaaa...... | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1667 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
continuation: --------------- indhi vinaa nenu asalu ee culprits ni custody loki teesukunaa..asalu velladhari details enti ani valla cellphones call log open chesanu..ikkade ee incident twist ayindhi....aa call logs lo maaku aa nite 1.00 am ki call chesinaa Ravi number vundhi...I'm surprised...completely...asalu Ravi ki ee idhariki enti relation ane thought vachindhi....may be friends ayi vuntaremo anukunaaa... around 9.00 pm time lo 5 calls from Ravi...mari mugguru kalise drugs teesukunte..Ravi car lo endhuku ledu...why is ravi in Anirvesh house..? asalu Ravi naaku chepinatu just job chesthunadaa...inkaa emayinaa chesthadaaaa? asalu aa idharu rape chesinaa aa ammayi evaru...aa ammayi ekkada vundhi..? ane questions naaku... so nenu ventane aa ammayi kosam vethakatam start chesanu...accident jarigindhi Ameerpet route lo kadhaa.so aa route lo vethakatam start chesanu...desperate gaa vethukunaa naaku..okka old building kanapadindhi. almost padipoye stage lo vundhu aa building...aa building lo emmina vuntundhaa ani choosanu.. rape chesinaa ammati akkade vundhi...nenu ventane aa ammayini dagariki velli choosanu...I WAS SHOCKED...naa kalanu nene namalekapoyanu....she is still alive..kaani unconscious..ventane thanani hospital lo join chesanu.... Director anxiery tho asalu endhuku shock ayaru meeru..thanu still live gaa vunandhukaaa...? Inspector : ledhu..I know this girl...thana peru anjali.... Director (desperate gaa) : ela telusu..? Inspector : SHE IS THE LOVER OF ANIRVESH Director (shocked) : what...? Inspector: yes... okka 1 min..shock tharuvathaa... Director ;So intakhi aa ammayi ela vundhi..? Inspector : she is OK now..kaani anirvesh chanipoyadani telisi..chaala badhaa padindhi... Director : Inthaki Anjali ki telisindhaa Anirvesh ki Blood cancer ani Inspector: yes..Anjali adhe roju (anirvesh chanipoyina day) Anirvesh doctor friend ki call chesi telusukundhi... Inspector : aa roju thanu Anirvesh intiki urgent gaa veldhamani autos kosam try chesthundagaa..she observed th Mahesh car..aa urgency lo lift adigindhi... Director : Mari Mahesh , Anirvesh friends kadhaa..vallaki anjali evaro telidhaaa...? Inspector: ledhu..anirvesh secret gaa vunchadu... Director : Kaani inthaki aa ammayini endhuku rape chesaru..? Inspector: simple..drugs...drugs entha panainaa chepisthundhi...drugs mathulo aa ammayiki kuda soft drink lo mathu kalipi icharu..then after.. rape chesaru..aaa mathumandhu effect valle she was unconscious until morning.... Director: Devudu vuntadandi...drugs mathulo inkaa entha mandhi ni illa rape chesaro...accident ayi manchi pani ayindhi....inthaki aa idharu (mahesh and anand) ella vunnaru ippdudu... Inspector: Intensive care ninchi bayatapadaru..kaani mahesh ki back bone virigipoyindhi..Anand ki legs pani rakundaa ayipoyayi....nenu valaani investigate chesanu..vaalu thamma tappu voppukunaru... Director: good..alane kaavali...inthaki accident ella ayindhi... Inspeector ( smile ichi) : ikkada inko twist vundhi..... Director (malli shock tho) ; malli em twist andi.... Inspector: ee accident jarigindhi Ravi valla.... Director (utter shock lo) ...what..damn...em chepthunaru...Ravi aa..ella..? Inspector : Ravi aa roju aa idhari tho pub lo enjoy cheyaledhu..he was enjoying seperately with his friend Director: yes..adhi telisindhe kadhaaa.... Inspector: Ikkade twist vundhi....thaginaa mathu lo Ravi bike drive chesthu lost control...control endhuku loss ayedante...mundhugaa vehicle ravatam valla...aa vehicle evaridho kaadhu...Mahesh and Anand drive chesthunaa Car...aa car glare padi...Ravi bike meedha ninchi kindha padadu...sudden gaa bike choosi ..car ni turn chedhamana thodaralo ...car lost control..and they hit a electrc pole... taginaa mathu lo Ravi ki em jarigindho teliyadhu..normal gaa malli bike start chesukonni vellipoyadu... idhanthaa vintunaa director ki shock..... Director : Ante aa idharu illa avataniki karanam ..RAVI aaa? Inspector ; okka vidhangaa yes... Director; Ravi bike valle ani ela chepthunaru..? Inspector ; Car Accident spot anthaa observe chesthaa vunte I found a locket...aa locket Ravi dhe anni tharuvathaa anirvesh nichi dorikinaa photos tho telisindhi.....so..its Ravi.... | ||
| Anand_n Junior Artist Username: Anand_n Post Number: 704 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 209.183.51.15 Rating: N/A |
Dharkar, That Ravi is not the murderer was obvious from part 1..he is the quintessential red herring story bagundi but there is a major logical flaw or the inspector is lying...the girl was unconscious,there was no struggle,skin, scratches undatam illogical aa chal ke tujhe main leke chalu ik aise gagan ke tale jahan gam bhi na ho, aansoo bhi na ho,bas pyaar hi pyaar pale ik aise gagan ke tale http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zWUOI_oxeOc&feature=related | ||
| Idle_yzag Side Hero Username: Idle_yzag Post Number: 3859 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.80.153.5 Rating: N/A |
Inka yenni parts babu? 5 annav, malli 6th poyindi reel | ||
| Megapowerkkd Junior Artist Username: Megapowerkkd Post Number: 502 Registered: 05-2008 Posted From: 76.235.57.34 Rating: N/A |
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| Batthar_bindaas Side Hero Username: Batthar_bindaas Post Number: 6502 Registered: 12-2006 Posted From: 70.111.20.42 Rating: N/A |
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| Batthar_bindaas Side Hero Username: Batthar_bindaas Post Number: 6501 Registered: 12-2006 Posted From: 70.111.20.42 Rating: N/A |
gud one mama....recchipo anthey.... | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1666 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
Office bayata okka movie director waiting for Inspector....thana movie kosam okka real life incident story ni use chesukundhamani Inspector tho appointment teesukunadu...time vachindhi.. Inspector ni meet ayyadu director....Inspector,director ki Anirvesh story explain cheyatam start chesthadu.... Incident vinna director ki chaala questions..idhi intresting annaru..chaala plain gane vundhi..inthaki Ravi ee Anirvesh ni champadani ella chepthunaru..? Anirvesh ni ela chamapadu..? asalu endhuku champadu..?... Appudu Inspector Anirvesh ni Ravi champaledhu..kaani its a fix by me... Director shock...'asalem artham avatledhu...koncham clear gaa chepandi..' ani adguthadu... Inspector okka smile ichi...'ok..explain chesthanu..' so intha varaku meeku telisindi...Anirvesh champadadadu... ' ee incident jarigindhi 1.00 am ki..maaku somewhere round 12.30 ki police control room ninchi okka call vachindhi...about an accident...accident vachi ameerpet ki vele route lo...so immediate gaa accident spot ki ...okka car electric pole ni hit chesindhi...aa car lo idhaaru males aged around 30 yrs.. bagaa hurt ayyaru..car chalaa fast gaa drive chesinaa reason valla damage bagga ayindhi...idharu unconscious stage lo chaala gayalu tagili vunnaru...nenu ventane ambulance ki call chesi...aa idharini hospital ki move chesanu...' Director confuse ayyi..'Anirvesh story ki ee accident ki link enti..? ' ani aduguthadu... appudu Inspector smile ichi ..' Hospital lo join chesinaa aa idharini..next day details telusukovadaniki velinapudu..they are still in Intensive care...valla cellphones ..wallets ..maa dagare vuncham.. vallani treat chesthunaa aa doctor naaku chepinaa vishayalu ' these 2 are driving under influence of drugs...andhuke they have lost control...and most important thing is ee accident ki mundhu I think they were in a confrontation with a female...endhuku chepthunanu ante..valla finger nails lo vunna skin..female dhi ..and vari bodies meedha vunna scarthches choosthe ..as per my experience...They were involved in a rape before this accident...' indhi vinaa nenu (inspector) ee culprits ni custody loki teesukunaa..asalu velladhari details enti ani valla cellphones call log open chesanu..ikkade ee incident twist ayindhi....aa call logs lo maaku aa nite 1.00 am ki call chesinaa Ravi number vundhi...I'm surprised...asalu Ravi ki ee idhariki enti relation ane thought vachindhi....may be friends ayi vuntaremo anukunaaa... around 9.00 pm time lo 5 calls from Ravi...mari mugguru kalise drugs teesukunte..Ravi car lo endhuku ledu...why is ravi in Anirvesh house..? asalu Ravi naaku chepinatu just job chesthunadaa...inkaa emayinaa chesthadaaaa? asalu aa idharu rape chesinaa aa ammayi evaru...aa ammayi ekkada vundhi..? | ||
| Idle_yzag Side Hero Username: Idle_yzag Post Number: 3857 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.80.153.5 Rating: N/A |
sorry, thanks for correcting | ||
| Nanigadu Junior Artist Username: Nanigadu Post Number: 716 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 204.92.92.4 Rating: N/A |
relieving kadu revealing Dharkar bhayya story bagundi, aa accident gurunchi matladadu kada inspector, i think adi Anand and Mahesh ki jarigindi ani anukuntunnanu, tharvatha Ravi Anirvesh ni enduku champadu aney twist bagundi, continue cheyyi | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1665 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
IY..last part lo motham logics vuntayi..as ssaid this is a non-linear narration...u will see..pls wait... | ||
| Idle_yzag Side Hero Username: Idle_yzag Post Number: 3855 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.80.153.5 Rating: N/A |
yendhi vayya ETV serial laga laguthunav episodes ni, 4th episode lo yemi ledhu, only thing is relieving the culprit | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1664 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
Fourth part : -------------- Time : 12.50 am , location : main road Varsham padatam start .... varsham paduthunaa lekaa cheyakundaaa..bike meedha vachadu Ravi...anirvesh vunde apartment ki...Flat no 305 doors terichi vunayi..Anirvesh antu arusthu bedroom loki veladu..bedroom lo Anirvesh chachipoyi vunadu... Shock lo vunna Ravi.. ventane Anand ki call chesadu...no answer...Mahesh ki call chesadu..no answer...ventane policeki call chesadu..questions ...police ki answers cheppadu Ravi... Policelu flat ki vacharu..Forensic team kooda vachindhi...spot lo vunna clues ni collect chesukunaru... Kaani inkaa case ni deal chese Inspector raledhu...everyone is waiting for the inspector...Ravi inkaa shock lo ninchi bayatakai raledu..taginaa mathu motham vadilindhi....he is sitting in a corner smoking ciggarrete.... Inkaa inspector raledhani..okka constable Inspector ki call chesadu...'Sir ekkadunaru..hatyaa jariginaa spot ki eppudosthunaru.." appudu Inpsector ' yeah..inkaa okka 30 mins paduthundhi..ee accident spot ninchi patients ni hospital ki pampinche erpatu chesi vasthanu..'ani chepi phone petesthadu... After 15 mins... Inspector Flat # 305 ki vasthadu....Anirvesh body ni careful gaa observe chesi...Ravi ni questioning start chesthadu...Ravi thanu room ki ragane Anirvesh hatya cheyabadi vunnadani chepthadu...Ravi notloninchi inkaa whisky smell vasthune vundhi... Ravi ni question chesinaa tharuvathaa...motham flat anthaa okka round vesthadu...bedroom lo safe open avatam choosi...enti ani safe open chesthadu... corner lo koorchonni chusthunaa Ravi ni shake avatam start avuthundhi... Safe open chesinaa inspector ki konni prescriptions...medical reports...inkaa konni photos dorukuthayi... Forensic team,photographers andharu valla work complete chesukuntaru...Inspector bayata part chesi vunna Anirvesh bike ni check chesthadu..inkaa konni medical reports dorukuthayi...avani Inspector thana remand loki tessukuntadu.....Ravi ni mathram station ki ramani chepthadu....Flat # 305 ni sealed..investigation starts... After one week.... -------------------- Anirvesh ni hatya chesinaa karanam valla Ravi ni custody loki teesukuntaru policelu.... with all proofs... After 1 year ----------------- Location : Inspector office ------------------------------------ Office bayata okka movie director waiting for Inspector....thana movie kosam okka real life incident story ni use chesukundhamani Inspector tho appointment teesukunadu...time vachindhi.. Inspector ni meet ayyadu director.... Inspector,director ki Anirvesh story explain cheyatam start chesthadu.... | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1663 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
JHR..thanks mama for ur suggestions....u will reconsider some points after 4th and 5th parts..... | ||
| Mikkymouse Junior Artist Username: Mikkymouse Post Number: 62 Registered: 04-2008 Posted From: 216.111.115.2 Rating: N/A |
babu Daarkhar, vachamu, story kosam wait chestunnam. tvaraga post babu. | ||
| Jambalahaart_raja Junior Artist Username: Jambalahaart_raja Post Number: 19 Registered: 07-2008 Posted From: 146.184.0.114 Rating: N/A |
//Jandhyala garu cheppinattu Illu bagundi annavadu Engineer avvakkaraledu kada// ee point nachhi naa points chepthunnaa... 1. story etu velthondo clear gaa teliyatamledu. 2. narration is just about OK, professionalism lekapovachhu but practise makes perfect, industry ki kaavaalsina oka manchi writer unnadu neelo. 3. descriptions lo ekkuva incidents meeda base ayyindi, this is movie style writing. actual story style writing lo character-sketches meeda base undaali. 4. story strength comes when writer makes the reader imagine while reading. aa imagination entha elevate aithe antha manchi writing annattu. 5. incidents koodaa chaalaa common vi use chesaaru. ekkado oka pinch of difference teeskochhi unte baavundedi. this is where creativity does the trick. over all, commendable effort!!! all the best, looking forward to improvements in your later parts. | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1662 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
Bump for non-readers.... | ||
| Chantabbayi Side Hero Username: Chantabbayi Post Number: 2016 Registered: 01-2008 Posted From: 86.9.102.214 Rating: N/A |
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| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1661 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
This is an open challenge... nenu climax part vesina tharuvathaa everyone will read again or give a look at all the parts ...antha gripping gaa vuntundhi... GUESSESS on this story are welcome.... Climax 2morrow at 11.00 am.... antha varaku Thanks for reading..and have a good night ( US Dbers ki) ..india DBers ki ..please read my story...its gonna be a different story.. | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1660 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
yep 12.00 am ... | ||
| Movie_fan Junior Artist Username: Movie_fan Post Number: 526 Registered: 04-2008 Posted From: 76.193.117.232 Rating: N/A |
am emo  ... part 4 eppudu babai ...Eto vellipoyindi Manasu | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1659 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
sorry its actually 12.00 pm | ||
| Movie_fan Junior Artist Username: Movie_fan Post Number: 525 Registered: 04-2008 Posted From: 76.193.117.232 Rating: N/A |
Bavundi babai... very interesting so far... very good narration....kakapothe, chinna suggestions... suspense thriller annav kabatti proof reading chesko... part 3 lo starting lo 12annav then again 11pm annav... ilanti minor vi... And then, AOR polikalu kanipinchayi lift scene and drunkards lift ivvadam, and then drug mix ayina drink ammayi tagadam... but ending diff ga vundi le.. just improvizations cheptunna... ante nenedo baga rastha ani kadu, Jandhyala garu cheppinattu Illu bagundi annavadu Engineer avvakkaraledu kada Keep up ur good work babai ... pls continueEto vellipoyindi Manasu | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1658 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: |
/b{Third part} Location: pub, time : 9.45 pm -------------------------------------------- Ravi dagaraninchi Brown sugar teesukuna Mahesh and Anand pub loki velipoyaru...pub lo full hungama..anthaaa Mahesh and Anand friends...party celebrate chesukuntunaru...Brown sugar andhariki supply cheyatam start chesaru...vathavaranam chaala enthusiastic modalayindhi..andharu aa drug ni taste cheyatam start chesaru...every one started to became lively... time 12.00 ayindhi.. Pub lo anthaa commited, lekapothe couples...pub lively gaa vunna..Anand needs something else...adhe ammayi.....Mahesh tho chepathadu Anand...Mahesh pub antha survey chesi..sorry mams..better luck next time ani chepthadu..kaani anand chaala desperate gaa mama I need one at this time antaadu..So appudu they get out of the pub... Mahesh thana car start chesi..they just follow the road....evarainaa ammayi dhorukuthundaa ani... its 11.00 pm..sudden gaa okka ammayi ...alone on the road..asking for a lift desperatetly... Mahesh car aputhaadu..she asks can be give me a lift top Ameerpet.. appudu mahesh.."yes ..ofcourse ..we are going to Hitech City..we can drop u...no problem.." Car lo kurchuntundhi aa ammayi...she looks very tensed... ..by the way! what ur name ' ani aduguthadu... appudu aa ammayi ..koncham tadapaduthu.. "anjali" ani chepthundhui.. 'Oh..nice name' ani antadu Anand... "enti chaala tensed gaa vunaaru..any thing serious" ani aduguthadyu Anand... appudu Anjali.."adem ledhu...nenu Ameerpet ki vellali fast gaaa..I have some urgent work" ani chepthundhi "Dont worry..we will reach ameerpet in no time..have a coke in the mean time" ani anand antadu... Anjali : no thanks.. Anand: parvaledhu tessukondi..u look very tensed..please appudu anjali drinks the cool drink.. Kaaani aa drink lo drugs kalipaadu Anand.... Anand manasulo : 'thagu baby thaagu...bagaa thaagu..I need u.." ani anukuntadu.. Drink taginaa Anjali maathu tho nidhra loki jarukuntundhi.... Mahesh and Anand stop there car in a remote place ..aa patiki Anjali unconscious ayipothundhi.. Anand rapes Anjali..tooo desperate..anjali unconscious ayinaa rape chesthadu.. aa tharuvathaa Mahesh.... After doing there activities with anjali...anjali ni akkade vadilesi...Mahesh and anand leave the place...car lo akkadinindi velipotharu... appatike drugs tessukunaa Mahesh driving...fast ga velalanaa desperation tho they overtake all the cars... infact they overtake everyone..any car...80kmph speed lo velthunaru.. Time 12.25 pm antha rash gaa velthunaa Mahesh loses control..hits a electric poll hardly... } | ||
| Zulu Comedian Username: Zulu Post Number: 1123 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 70.112.167.87 Rating: N/A |
Migatha parts kooda manchiga raayi, Anukokunda Oka roju, Johnny Gaddar range lo unnayi expectations ikkada.. Think Global,Act Local | ||
| Anand_n Junior Artist Username: Anand_n Post Number: 703 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 67.10.130.102 Rating: N/A |
dharkaar Response encouragement kosam wat cheste kashtam mee RGV laaga meeru continue avvatameee audience sangati telisinde kada - caste ane item number lepote boxoffice lo post count mogaduaa chal ke tujhe main leke chalu ik aise gagan ke tale jahan gam bhi na ho, aansoo bhi na ho,bas pyaar hi pyaar pale ik aise gagan ke tale http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zWUOI_oxeOc&feature=related | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1657 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
Thanks IY..thanks for your effort... I will tell u ..this story will have all the logical conclusions....nenu evarini dissapoint cheyanu...I will not be surprised if we have Q and A session on this one...I will bet.... | ||
| Idle_yzag Side Hero Username: Idle_yzag Post Number: 3854 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.80.178.254 Rating: N/A |
Story bagundi kani release time evening pettav, morning start chesi 2pm ki subham card paddithey, cinema flop ayna collections(replies & views) bagundevi Till now above avg talk, dialogues lo one liners punch ledu, kamedy angle laga okkati try cheyalsindhi Posting from bb, so can't give more comments | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1656 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
Unortho kaaaka....What abt ur response...? | ||
| Zulu Comedian Username: Zulu Post Number: 1121 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 70.112.167.87 Rating: N/A |
Bagundi Narration..Continue..Continue.. Neeku naa fullu madhathu prakatisthunna.. Think Global,Act Local | ||
| Nanigadu Junior Artist Username: Nanigadu Post Number: 715 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 99.231.38.187 Rating: N/A |
Babai i can understand your frustration, ye caste meedo veyyalsindi thread, leka pothey hero characters ki first names kuda add cheyyalsindi, manchi response vacchedemo... I appreciate your efforts babai, Quantum edo already ilanti story teesaru ani icchadu kada links, I see some similarities, but I like the way you explained the premise of each character, baga rasavu babai, keep up the damn good work, please continue... | ||
| Jalsa Junior Artist Username: Jalsa Post Number: 460 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 69.115.255.167 Rating: N/A |
evaru em cheyyalo nuvvey cheppesthunnavu ga bedar... j/k story pettu baabu...next emavuthundho aney curiosity tho vesaanu prev post...nuvvu mariiiiiiiii dil pe teeskuntunnavu | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1655 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
Dude dhenikaina inspiration vundali...kaaani inspiration ki korathaa... MOvies and MOvies related section lo thread vesthe kanisam noted Dbers post cheyadaniki kooda try cheyaledhu..CBN vongunadu..Chiru padukunadu..YSR padukunadu..Chiru kurchunadu..ane thread vesthe..100..lakapothe 200 ..BS...endhi bhai idhi..kanisam kastapadanu appreciation ledhu...BS....ante ee thread ki vasthe vaala parvuvu pothadi anna feeling... | ||
| Jalsa Junior Artist Username: Jalsa Post Number: 459 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 69.115.255.167 Rating: N/A |
mundhu story eyyi ehe....seppindhey padhey padhey septhunnav...vishayam pettu ikkada | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1654 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
Third part ready ...please concentrate on first 2 parts...this is a non-linear narration...koncham confusing gaa vuntundhi but please concentrate...DONT LOOSE UR HOLD...... | ||
| Chantabbayi Side Hero Username: Chantabbayi Post Number: 2014 Registered: 01-2008 Posted From: 86.9.102.214 Rating: N/A |
story lo edaina vamp character introduce seyi..maanchi kasak scenes edaina pettu | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1652 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
motham raasanu kaaani suggestions isthe inkaa narration gripping chedhamani... | ||
| Chantabbayi Side Hero Username: Chantabbayi Post Number: 2013 Registered: 01-2008 Posted From: 86.9.102.214 Rating: N/A |
antey nuvvu already raasi pettukunavemo...mellaga trailors type part by part release chesttunavemo ani anukunna  | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1650 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
complete seyatam enti...story 4 /5 parts ...inkaa 2 parts ee aayayi... | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1649 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
Charishmaa vunaaa Dbers koncham ee thread lo mee padham moppi puneetham cheyandi...ela vundho cheppandi.... Drawback vachi ..dialogs...I did not have time to write dialogs...so raw gaa undochooo... | ||
| Chantabbayi Side Hero Username: Chantabbayi Post Number: 2011 Registered: 01-2008 Posted From: 86.9.102.214 Rating: N/A |
story eppudo complete chesav kadha mama...inkka suggestions endhi  | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1648 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
inthaki single vesinaa a single poori sharma evaru...suggestion ichi..encourage cheyandi..improve chesthaaa... | ||
| Anand_n Junior Artist Username: Anand_n Post Number: 702 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 209.183.51.12 Rating: N/A |
Dharkaar, Nice ..good flow and breakpoints Good ol murder mystery - making my son read Murder on the Orient Express to introduce the genre to him aa chal ke tujhe main leke chalu ik aise gagan ke tale jahan gam bhi na ho, aansoo bhi na ho,bas pyaar hi pyaar pale ik aise gagan ke tale http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zWUOI_oxeOc&feature=related | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1647 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
I have adapted the non-linear narration technique | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1646 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 68.100.139.121 Rating: N/A |
clip choosanu..kaani just intial scenes naa story tho match avuthayi....kaaaaaaaani inkaaaaaaa suspense anthaaaaa 3rd part ninche...wait cheyandi.......it will be completely different ...believe me..... | ||
| Spy_india Comedian Username: Spy_india Post Number: 1645 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 170.35.224.64 Rating: N/A |
bagudni dharkar continue .. Q
story chadivi aa clips chosotunte adelaa unnadi .. baagundi | ||
| Just4fun Hero Username: Just4fun Post Number: 12548 Registered: 10-2007 Posted From: 24.131.221.241 Rating: N/A |
Iragadeesav mama.,,!!!!! Intaki aa policello mana Ravino evaru!!! | ||
| Quantummorphed Junior Artist Username: Quantummorphed Post Number: 843 Registered: 06-2008 Posted From: 99.141.92.112 Rating: N/A |
http://video.google.com/videosearch?q=vijayawada+vectors&emb =0# | ||
| Chantabbayi Side Hero Username: Chantabbayi Post Number: 2008 Registered: 01-2008 Posted From: 86.9.102.214 Rating: N/A |
continue seyi mama...manchi suspense thriller la undhi katha | ||
| Quantummorphed Junior Artist Username: Quantummorphed Post Number: 842 Registered: 06-2008 Posted From: 99.141.92.112 Rating: N/A |
Annai.......ilanti story already cinema teesaru...short film....maa frnd unnadu AZ lo...valla gang teesindhi ani cheppadu naaku chaala sarlu....story line almost same...konni clips kooda unnayi... http://video.google.com/videosearch?q=vijayawada+vectors&emb =0# | ||
| Jodhaa Side Hero Username: Jodhaa Post Number: 4669 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 75.185.97.155 Rating: N/A |
 No one can make you feel inferior without your permission, remember they are no better | ||
| Netra Comedian Username: Netra Post Number: 1179 Registered: 01-2008 Posted From: 131.107.0.102 Rating: N/A |
3rd part bro..bhale undhi katha Abhimanula gundello diavam "Chiranjeevi" | ||
| Telugubidda Junior Artist Username: Telugubidda Post Number: 14 Registered: 05-2008 Posted From: 158.140.1.20 Rating: N/A |
Dharkar story narration bagundi | ||
| Sachin Side Hero Username: Sachin Post Number: 2737 Registered: 04-2008 Posted From: 68.100.138.242 Rating: N/A |
annai good...baagundi.. I HATE CASTE FANATICS | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1645 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
BUMP ... FIRST and SECOND PARTS ARE POSTED..PLEASE READ THEM..SUGGESTIONS ARE WELCOME... FIRST PART and SECOND PART connect chesukokapother 3rd part lo u will be lost.... | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1644 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
SECOND PART IS READY... THIS IS WHERE THE STORY STARTS....PLEASE CONNECT it WITH THE FIRST PART... | ||
| Netra Comedian Username: Netra Post Number: 1178 Registered: 01-2008 Posted From: 131.107.0.102 Rating: N/A |
excellent narration maama.. Abhimanula gundello diavam "Chiranjeevi" | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1643 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: |
Second Part ----------- Same Day, Time - 7.30 pm ,Location: Flat # 305 ----------------------------------------------- Ravi Anirvesh flat ki vachaadu..Anirvesh inkaa raledhu office ninchi... Anirvesh ki call chesadu..Drive chesthunaa anirvesh phone lift chesadu Ravi: entraaa...inkaa velaledhaa doctor dagariki...epudu vasthunav....nee flat lo waiting ikkada.... Anirvesh: ledhu raa ..on the way...enti cheppu Ravi: Em ledhu vache mundhu mandhuu, mukka patukonni raa...chala rojulu ayindhi kadha setting vesi....ivaala vedham.. Anirvesh: nenu thaganu kaani..nee kosam teesukonni vasthaa...ok naa Ravi: nuvvu o yedhavi...nee istam..atlane kaniyi..kaani thondaragaa raa babooo. Anirvesh: ok ..ok..idhigo hospital ki vachesaa...sare bye Ravi phone pettesadu...TV on chesukonni channel V choodatam start chesadu...konni songs choosina tharuvathaa akkali tho emmina tinnali ani..table meedha vunna apple choosi..''appati varaku saripothundhi..'" ani akkade vunna knife teesukoni cut chesukonni okka 2 apples tinesthadu..attu gaa velthu...Anirvesh home safe open vundatam choosthadu..ventane velli safe open chesi choosthadu..documents tho paatu koncham cash vutundhi...aa cash Ravi tessukonni thana wallet lo pettukoni safe ni close chesthadu... malli vachi TV lo channels marusthu vundagaa..okka call vasthundhi...call is from his partner.. Partner : ekkadunav raa... Ravi; friend dagaraa vunna..emmina news.. partner : emm ledhu..manchi deal vachindhi.. Ravi ;Entha weight... Partner: 250gms varaku vundhi... Ravi: ok..mari nakenthaa partner : as usual 50-50...1 hr lo sale chesthe profit lo 60 neeku 40 naaku..emantav... Ravi: ok..eekadiki ravali... partner: mana adaa ki vacheyi...wait chesthu vuntaa... Ravi: Sare okka 30 mins lo vasthaa.. Call disconnect chesinaa Ravi Anirvesh ki call chesadu... Ravi: Orai..nenu pani meedha bayataki velthunaa...malli vasthaanu...wait cheyii..ok naa ...bye Time 9.00 pm... Akkadi ninchi Ravi thana bike lo thana partner chepinaa site ki velli 'Brown sugar' collect chesukonni ventane Mahesh ki call chesthadu... Mahesh: entraa ..ee madhyaa kanapadatledhu.. Ravi: Koncham work lo busy mama..ekkadunav.. Mahesh; Pub lo vunna...Anand kosam waiting ...enti vishayalu Ravi: emm ledhu..manchi saraku vachindhi..kavalante cheppu.. Mahesh: avunaa..dhani kosame waiting chala rojula ninchi..entha... Ravi: best saruku enthainaa tessukovichu.. Mahesh; Entha cheppu.. Ravi : okka lakshaa Mahesh; sare mari..nenu pub bayataa naa car lo wait chesthanu..nuvvocheyi.. Ravi: Ok..nenu 30 mins lo vasthaa... Time : 9.30 pm.. Ravi pub bayata vunna Mahesh car dagaraa waiting..mahesh ki call chesi bayataki ramani chepathadu..inthalo akkadiki Anand entry ichaadu...Ravi ni choosi Anand: entraa ikkada waiting...vadedi.. Ravi:vasthunaadu... Anand: enti emmina dhorikindhaa.. Ravi:avunu Anand: edhi ekkadaa... Ravi:ammayi kaadhu brown sugar.. Anand: oh..neninkaa ammayemo anukunaa.. Ravi: wait cheyi..next week call chesthaa.. inthalo akkadiki Mahesh vachadu..mugguru kalisi car lo koorchonni deal matladukonni..Ravi ki 1 lakh ichesi..mahesh and Anand pub lokki vellipotharu..Ravi thanaki work vundhani cheppi..thana partner dagaraku velthadu... partner dabbu kosam ready gaa wait cheshuntadu.,..Ravi raagane thana share teesukonna anandham lo okka peg whisky vesukundhamani start avutharu..okka peg kaastha okka bottle avuthundhi...Ravi chaala tagesaadu... ikaa bar close ayye time ki intiki veldhamani bike start chesi..inti vypu velthuntadu...kaani antha dhooram emm veltham ani thana bike ni Anirvesh inti vypu bayalderuthadu.....thaginaa mathulo driving ella chesthunado kooda telidhu..dabbulu vachinaa anandam, mandu taginaa mathu lo drive chesthu..sudden gaa edhurgaa vasthunaa vehicle ni choosukokaa bike skid ayyi kindhaa padathadu.. okka 5 mins tharuvathaa..malli normal ayyi bike start chesukonni anirvesh intiki velthadu......... appudu Time 12.30 am..... ------------END OF SECOND PART------------------------------------------------ | ||
| Nanigadu Junior Artist Username: Nanigadu Post Number: 713 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 204.92.92.4 Rating: N/A |
bagundi babai, baga rasav, continue cheyyi | ||
| Megapowerkkd Junior Artist Username: Megapowerkkd Post Number: 484 Registered: 05-2008 Posted From: 71.64.159.111 Rating: N/A |
Bagundi..Continue Cheyyu. | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1642 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
Bump...first part chadavandi..second part inko 15 mins lo post chesthaa.... | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1641 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
Thanks mama...reply ichav... | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1640 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
chadivaraa evarainaa..any suggestions..suggestions isthe I will implement them in next parts... | ||
| Batthar_bindaas Side Hero Username: Batthar_bindaas Post Number: 6489 Registered: 12-2006 Posted From: 70.111.20.42 Rating: N/A |
continue | ||
| Dhaarkaar Comedian Username: Dhaarkaar Post Number: 1639 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: |
As promised idhi nenu rasinaa story..story is a suspense thriller....divided in to 4 parts.....this is the first part....story lenghty gaa vunna..chaala easy gaa understandable...give it a try... ------------------------------------------------- Bagga varsham..okka apartment.. Intro: (Apartment choopisthu...background lo chaala coarse voice...) ------ ee apartment okka 15 yrs back kattaru..motham 200 flats... Flat no. 305 ....2 bedroom flat...ee flat lone mana main character living..peru Anirvesh. Anirvesh challa lively ..athani job kooda lively.. manchiga plan chesukuntadu life ni..shares, plots baagane konnadu...marriage kavalsinaa age kooda pondhadu... Anirvesh ki chepukodhagaa friends 3 ...Ravi, Anand, Mahesh...adharu bachelors... Ravi - Intelligent ...gambling lo mathrame...eethani gurinchi okka mukkalo chepalante.. stairs kaana elevator ne bagaa istapadathadu.. Anand, MAhesh - idharu richie rich...party kosam life.. life kosam ammayilu anukune type... Present: ----------- aa roju...varsham paduthunaa lekaa cheyakundaaa..bike meedha vachadu Ravi...Flat no 305 doors terichi vunayi..Anirvesh antu arusthu bedroom loki veladu..bedroom lo Anirvesh chachipoyi vunadu... Shock lo vunna Ravi.. ventane Anand ki call chesadu...no answer...Mahesh ki call chesadu..no answer...ventane policeki call chesadu..questions ...police ki answers cheppadu Ravi... Policelu flat ki vacharu..Forensic team kooda vachindhi...spot lo vunna clues ni collect chesukunaru... ee scene jarigindhi next day early morning 1.00 am... Adhe roju at 7.00 pm --------------------- Anirvesh quick gaa thana laptop ni shutdown chesi..bag lo pettukonni...lift dagaraku velthadu...lift dagraa thana collegaue 'enti boss thondargaa velthunav ee roju.,..roju 10.00 varaku seat ki athukapothav..enti sangathi..? girl friend call aa? '. Anirvesh: 'adhemi ledhu naa friend doctor dagraa appoitment vundhi ..so.." Parking lot lo vunna thana bike ni start chesi, helmet , hand glouses petukonni fast gaa main road lo vunna traffic lo merge authadu... Driving chesthunaa Annirvesh mohamalo tension..edho anxiety...thanalo thane chaala alochisthunadu...anthagaa alochinchasinaa vishayam entante..athaniki 2 days back morning excess cough valla blood paduthundhi...so adhi thana friend doc ki cheppi ..medical tests chepinchukonni..reports lo em vasthundho nani alochisthunadu.... cell phone ring avuthundhi...hands free one chesthadu..phone Ravi dagaraninchi Ravi: entraaa...inkaa velaledhaa doctor dagariki...epudu vasthunav....nee flat lo waiting ikkada.... Anirvesh: ledhu raa ..on the way...enti cheppu Ravi: Em ledhu vache mundhu mandhuu, mukka patukonni raa...chala rojulu ayindhi kadha setting vesi....ivaala vedham.. Anirvesh: nenu thaganu kaani..nee kosam teesukonni vasthaa...ok naa Ravi: nuvvu o yedhavi...nee istam..atlane kaniyi..kaani thondaragaa raa babooo. Anirvesh: ok ..ok..idhigo hospital ki vachesaa...sare bye hospital ki vachesaadu..bike park chesi...doctor room ki velthadu...Doctor chaala dissapointed gaa vunnadu..mundhu Anirvesh medical reports...enter ayinaa anirvesh doctor ni choosi Anirvesh: enti bad news aa Doc (almost tears tho) - not that bad..we can try.. do something . Anirvesh: serious gaa cheppu Doc:sorry ra....Blood cancer..final stage... Anirvesh: entha time vundhi..? Doc: maximum 3 months... idhi vinna Anirvesh doc ki bye cheppi akkada ninchi velipothadu..fast gaa thana bike dagaraku vachi..back pocket lo ninchi wallet open chesi edvatam start chesthadu...enduku god illa chesavani feel avuthu..bike start chesi intiki start avuthadu...malli call vasthundhi...call miss chesthadu....malli call vasthundi..adhi Ravi dagaraninchi... Ravi: Orai..nenu pani meedha bayataki velthunaa...malli vasthaanu...wait cheyii..ok naa ...bye Anirvesh silent gaa vinni phone pettesthadu... intiki start ayyadu... 30 mins tharuvatha flat ki vachesadu... Time 10.00 pm... Anirvesh alochinchi alochinchi bagga stressful gaa vunnadu...helmet teesesii..bike bayate park chesi..flat lopaliki velthadu... bed meedha padi..Edusthu...alochisthu..nidhraloki pothadu..kaalaki shoes, chetiki glouses alane vunnayi... ------------------------------END OF PART 1------------------------------------ |
