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Cinejeevi Side Hero Username: Cinejeevi Post Number: 5198 Registered: 01-2008 Posted From: 91.103.41.50 Rating: N/A |
intaki main character jail ninchi intikelladaa leka intlonchi paripoyi chala kaalam tarvata intikeltunnaadaa? malla story chadive opika ledu.. koncham telugu lo cheppanDi pls kurraaDanukuni kunukulu teesE verridaanikee pilupu.. idE naa mElukolupu | ||
Mrhyderabad Side Hero Username: Mrhyderabad Post Number: 6358 Registered: 01-2008 Posted From: 167.230.38.120 Rating: N/A |
HD, Good one... Kallaku kattinattu narrate cheyadam ante ide emo :-) If god doesn't like the way I live, let him tell me, not you | ||
Humpty_dumpty Side Hero Username: Humpty_dumpty Post Number: 7666 Registered: 02-2009 Posted From: 98.231.138.194 Rating: N/A |
thanks all...will watch out for the mistakes | ||
Elcaminocapastrino Megastar Username: Elcaminocapastrino Post Number: 20211 Registered: 03-2008 Posted From: 98.207.90.202 Rating: N/A |
humpty mama...awesome anthey....perfect intro.... | ||
Platypus Junior Artist Username: Platypus Post Number: 276 Registered: 01-2008 Posted From: 122.169.158.34 Rating: N/A |
Cute.  liked it. A bit incomplete though.There are 10 types of people in this world. Those who understand binary and those who don't. | ||
Uppu Comedian Username: Uppu Post Number: 1663 Registered: 11-2007 Posted From: 206.16.32.135 Rating: N/A |
Nenu ekkado edo miss ayyanu  âGenerations to come will scarce believe that such a one as this walked the earth in flesh and blood.â | ||
Humpty_dumpty Side Hero Username: Humpty_dumpty Post Number: 7656 Registered: 02-2009 Posted From: 98.231.138.194 Rating: N/A |
thanks yaa kind of overlooked describing his brother's influence on him wanted to throw in a crush angle with his aunt's daughter...but did not aunt looking lost, his home looking empty and dark is the gloom that is present due to .... edo try chesaanu...next time will be clearer | ||
Guttonkay Side Hero Username: Guttonkay Post Number: 4288 Registered: 05-2008 Posted From: 148.87.67.136 Rating: N/A |
nice. awesome nostalgia. ee lines didn't add anything to the story, unless you are planing on seralizing this or going to post a part 2. "He saw his aunt sitting in an arm chair. She looked lost. He wanted to say hello but moved on. He wanted to meet the man who was responsible for everything he was. The rest could wait. " | ||
Anand_n Side Hero Username: Anand_n Post Number: 7362 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 167.24.104.150 Rating: N/A |
Nice Konchem incomplete anipinchindi - like you refer to the man resposible for who the protagonist is and end without divulging who that is ..aa chal ke tujhe main leke chalu ik aise gagan ke tale jahan gam bhi na ho, aansoo bhi na ho,bas pyaar hi pyaar pale | ||
Secondcup Comedian Username: Secondcup Post Number: 1207 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 199.74.155.50 Rating: N/A |
nice one mama , bagundi. | ||
Mega Side Hero Username: Mega Post Number: 3439 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 144.160.5.25 Rating: N/A |
HD thammdu cool! | ||
Humpty_dumpty Side Hero Username: Humpty_dumpty Post Number: 7652 Registered: 02-2009 Posted From: 38.117.247.14 Rating: N/A |
@sachin, twitter, nani thank you ! | ||
Sachin Hero Username: Sachin Post Number: 16032 Registered: 04-2008 Posted From: 198.204.133.208 Rating: N/A |
good one annai..... ittantivi enno marenno raaasi antha famous avvali ani korukuntannaaaa | ||
Comedian Username: Twitter Post Number: 1442 Registered: 10-2009 Posted From: 151.191.175.204 Rating: N/A |
kallak kattav annai good job last two lines lo touch chesav. | ||
Rajusk Side Hero Username: Rajusk Post Number: 9707 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 165.254.117.43 Rating: N/A |
Meeku ivanni unnai..leni vallu disco vaati gurinchi.. | ||
Nanigadu Side Hero Username: Nanigadu Post Number: 4954 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 204.92.92.4 Rating: N/A |
good stuff humtpty, baga rasavu, screenplay(if that is what it is called - explaining the surrondings/situations etc) baga set chesavu anipinchindi naku... keep up the good work. When you point a fingre at some body remember that there are three fingers pointing at you and one finger pointing at God | ||
Humpty_dumpty Side Hero Username: Humpty_dumpty Post Number: 7647 Registered: 02-2009 Posted From: 38.117.247.14 Rating: N/A |
@MS thanks bro @rajusk DB lo morning nunchi gold, dollar rate, jewelery shopping ani seppi nannu depress chesi naalo hyder nee bayatak techaaru | ||
Mental_sachinodu Side Hero Username: Mental_sachinodu Post Number: 3603 Registered: 10-2008 Posted From: 63.161.147.10 Rating: N/A |
hum n dum bro... baagundhi... senti pandinchav ee sari... edho oka roju nenu oka story ettal ani decide ayya... the world of appearances may or may not be real, or both may and may not be real - or may be indescribable; or may be real and indescribable, or unreal and indescribable; or in the end may be read and unreal and indescribable - its all Syadvada | ||
Rajusk Side Hero Username: Rajusk Post Number: 9698 Registered: 02-2008 Posted From: 165.254.117.43 Rating: N/A |
Hyder HD roopam lo vachada..leka iddaru okate naa..antha confusion...gaa undi.. | ||
Humpty_dumpty Side Hero Username: Humpty_dumpty Post Number: 7645 Registered: 02-2009 Posted From: 38.117.247.14 Rating: |
He glanced at his watch for the umpteenth time. 7 AM. He could not sleep well all night. It was not the hard bed or the hustle and bustle of the train nor the alien conditions he was in. After five years at the post, mingling day in and day out with relative strangers, whom he could proudly associate with the one ambition, one goal which they all shared. He felt a bit sad and lonely after leaving his brethren. He wished to see them again but not too soon. He looked out of the window. He saw a few young boys down in their birthday suits playing in a small lake. Some of them were diving and swimming have a good time. Aah, the perfect morning. How much he missed it. When I go back, how wonderful it would be to go to the lake and catch up with old friends. Wonder what are they up to now? Are they too old for it? He smiled to himself. The day passed on. He lost count of the number of stations the train passed through. It was almost late afternoon. But he did not feel any hunger. He had spent many days where he endured long hours without food and yet never lost focus. The guy sitting across him ordered tea. The vendor poured tea into one of those small cups. He saw that the tea vendor a "raakhi" bound to his wrist. He thought of his younger sister, the darling of the family. Elder to her by a few years,he was her playmate. His elder brother tended to them as a father would. He sometimes thought how much their mother would have loved to see how they both cared for her. She was only 8 years old when he left home, thinking he will come back the next day. He could not wait any longer to see her. It was dark by now. He got down from the train and started to walk. The streets looked deserted. Village life does wind up early in the evening. He turned to his right. His home was only a few houses away. He took a deep breath and started to walk. He paused a little bit at the house with the tall coconut tree. His cheerful aunt and her daugther lived there. He remembered it was such a lively place. All the kids would flock to this house every evening. There would be endless games, songs and dance. He craned his neck to see if anyone was around. He saw his aunt sitting in an arm chair. She looked lost. He wanted to say hello but moved on. He wanted to meet the man who was responsible for everything he was. The rest could wait. He opened the gate. The front door was open. Though it was not yet bedtime, he saw that the lights were dimmed out. He wondered where every one was. Perhaps, he should have told them he was coming home. He took a couple of steps and stopped when he saw her. He heart filled up when she smiled at him. She still had the same aura of warmth. She nodded her head telling him to come closer. "Amma" he said and smiled. He finally came home. |
